托福独立写作例子拓展：学会“具体化”

写好托福开头段后，托福写作中的主体段例子的表达往往决定了同学们托福写作能否达到高分，对于例子，敲击键盘时同学们或多或少会冒出一些，但是你写的例子是否正确呢?怎么写出正确合适的例子呢?

写正确的例子，我们先看一道考题

2017年1月14号

As a student of university that has a long break between university semesters, the

university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:

1、Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study ;

2、Students must volunteer to work in the university' s city or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town.

Which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university?Why?

题目问大学生在假期的长假中拿出一个月的时间做事情

1.学一门和主修专业没有直接关联的课程;

2.在大学所在的城市或者家乡做有助改善城市或者家乡的志愿者工作

这里我们先从选第一个来举例说明。

来说一说“选择一门和主修没有关联的课程”的好处

举例方法：写一个具体的身边人

怎么写，如何创造可能有点大，我们用“编造”来形容大家可能更容易接受。在举例中出现的人不必用名人，也就是说写乔布斯，普京很有可能在例子上的得分不如我写隔壁老王或者小张，关键在于围绕主题的具体人物。

For instance, Zhang Jing, one of my next of kins, chose to learn English interpretation course last summer vacation. In spite of majoring in sociology, she still found it very useful to learn English interpretation. In the beginning of this year, she succeeded in getting more than dozens of chances for interview in multi-national companies because her interpretation skills gave her edge in the first round of screening. That means choosing a course on the subject that does not directly link with your major can also be very helpful.

这里的例子中我们来看几个关键点说一下具体

人物具体：包括姓、名以及和你的关系;这里我们用one of my next of kins一个近亲来做例子。

内容具体：虽然张静的主修专业是社会学(专业具体)，她选择了一门与主修专业无关的英语口译课(课程具体)，last summer vacation的时间和题目要求的long break 和one month 的时间符合，最终张静同学因为她学过口译课程而学会的口译技巧，使得她获得了很多跨国企业的面试机会(结果具体)，这样就体现出了因为选择一门与主修专业无关的课程而带来的好处。

按照以上的“具体化”建议，如果要选择第二个选项“在大学所在的城市或者家乡做有助改善城市或者家乡的志愿者工作”，各位是否掌握了怎么去写例子呢?