2018年雅思写作范文及点评:我的运动方式我做主?

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考鸭们都知道,2018年的雅思作文真题都来自于历史题库。本文就为大家梳理历年雅思写作真题范文——社会类话题:Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, but others think the people should have freedom to choose sports activities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.——2014年8月9日雅思写作真题

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Such is a human nature to explore and experience the unknown. A trend is that numerous people are fond of embarking on challenging sports events, such as mountain biking, rock climbing and scuba diving, especially among those dynamic young adults. Those who pursue excitement and the sense of refreshment in the dull routine daily life claim that life without risk is no life at all.(65)

探究和体验未知的世界是人之本性, 当下, 很多人,尤其是精力充沛的年轻人, 喜欢从事充满挑战的竞技体育项目, 例如山地自行车, 攀岩和海底潜水等。那些喜欢在枯燥的,日复一日的生活中追求刺激和新鲜的人声称, 人生没有冒险就不能称其为人生。

点评:首段自然开篇,没有争议焦点和写作意图,没有模版痕迹,留下想象空间。

Granted, a great many virtues could be gained via undertaking those risky or demanding sports activities. Primarily, the extreme adventures can be taken as is a sort of effective way to help players relieve their pressure and relax their mood, because the occupied modern life often deprive one's right of seeking relaxation. The popularity of bungee jumping accounts for risky sports' significant function in terms of reducing stress. Imaginably, one's working or study efficiency could be highly enhanced after doing his or her favorite sports events. Moreover, not only can the extreme adventures exert wholesome impacts, but also it could foster one's skills, chasten one's tenacity and forge one's frustration toleration. Some extreme adventures,such as rock climbing and surfing, requires high techniques or much perseverance. Ultimately, the extreme adventures could be developed into tempting tourism items, which could generate immense economic value.(143)

的确,从事极限运动利好很多。 第一, 这是一种极佳的方式帮助运动者缓解压力, 愉悦心情, 因为紧张的现代生活已经剥夺了人们放松休闲的权利。蹦极运动的流行就解释了运动在缓解压力方面的积极作用。可以想象, 运动之后,人们的工作学习效率都会提高。另外, 极限运动不仅仅有益健康, 还能培养人的技巧, 磨砺人的坚韧性以及铸造人的挫折忍受力, 一些运动, 例如攀岩和冲浪, 就需要人有极高的技巧和毅力。 最后, 极限运动可以开发成热门的旅游项目, 创造巨大的经济价值。

点评: 极限运动就是运动的利好, 就是户外活动的利好, 就是体育课的利好。第一点可以从健康缓解压力的角度展开。第二点论及到精神成面,用三剑客短语才艺展示一下。第三个论据可以上升到旅游经济。

Nonetheless, problems invariably ensue. One possible downside is that some perilous sports activities might become the roots of injuries and agonies. There exist high levels of injuries, which sometimes disable players and even ruin their whole lives. Another adverse aspect is that some intense extreme sports are merely an excuse for violence. To illustrate, boxing involves excessive violence and bloody contents so that it imposes adverse impact on adolescent TV viewers, namely, it might arouse their sadistic impulse.(78)

然而, 问题随之而来。第一, 危险性极高的运动可能会导致意外受伤和痛苦。这些意外有可能导致人的残疾或者毁掉人的一生。第二,一些剧烈的极端运动会成为暴力的借口。例如, 拳击比赛含有太多的暴力和血腥, 对于年轻人有不良的影响, 例如诱发他们的施虐冲动。

点评:弊端写成出两点, 理性客观. 模版个性化,路标词汇清晰,行文有亮点.

Personally, I encourage the extreme adventures, for it is a symbol of freedom, so it is citizens' elementary right to opt for his or her favorite sports activities. Efforts should be made to ensure risky sports events are thrilling, amusing and profit-making, however, to prevent accident and injury is highly recommended. (52)

个人而言, 我十分鼓励极限运动,这是自由的象征,这是公民的基本权利选择自己喜欢的运动。我们应该努力保证运动的刺激,有趣和盈利,但是, 采取措施去预防受伤和意外又是高度推荐的。

点评:尾段亮明立场,针对弊端再提出解决策略,观点无懈可击。

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