口语提分丨雅思口语批改问题汇总

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雅思口语问题：描述过于抽象

雅思口语话题：和陌生人的有趣谈话。

雅思口语原文：I’d like to share a funny story with you. When I was about 10 years old, you know, a boy full of energy and never in a peaceful mind, I was running around freely in a city park.

这位考生将“一次谈话”和“一个有趣的外国人”两个话题结合起来了，这个本身并没有问题，但是问题感觉干巴巴的，开头段介绍事情发生的时间地点人物。但是时间介绍上(when I was about 10 years old)太过于抽象，所以我加上了一句 it took place。并在I was running…前面加上one day来合理细化时间。you know, a boy full of energy and never in a peaceful mind此句显得多余，可以删去。

雅思口语批改：I’d like to share a funny story with you. It took place when I was about 10 years old. One day as I was jogging in a city park,

雅思口语问题：语序逻辑问题

雅思口语原文：Suddenly on the corner ,I nearly bumped into a middle-aged man who is a medium-built foreigner around 5.3 feet, a little fat but with sparkling eyes which is so beautiful and attractive that I couldn’t help looking so much. I stopped and said sorry to him sincerely. Fortunately He was not irritable and said it’s ok.

这段介绍事情的起因。因为在跑步的过程中遇到了外国人，顺便对其外貌进行了描述。很明显在几乎要撞上对方的时候是来不及看清对方长相的，所以此处直接用定语从句描述外貌不恰当。按照真实的事件发展，先撞上人，然后马上道歉，在对话过程中间看清楚对方的长相。同时，这位同学犯了一个错误，在过去时态里介绍外貌用了现在时。这样会产生误导。

雅思口语批改：One day as I was running around freely in a city park,I nearly bumped right into a man at a corner. Not until he apologized in poor Chinese did I realize he was a foreigner! To tell you the truth the guy was actually good-looking. He was about 5.3 feet tall, a little fat but blue eyes sparkled with charisma, which really appealed to me.

雅思口语问题：冗余赘述，逻辑连接词乱用

雅思口语原文：At the moment I found that there were about seven dogs frolicking around him, they seemed to be cute corgis then I asked him what was he doing with them?

接着注意到了外国人身边有七条柯基犬，(found改为noticed更为准确，seemed to be也显多余，可以直接删除)，于是有了这段对话。

此处要注意逻辑关系，看到小狗后才想起问他在干嘛，是因果关系，所以then改为so。宾语从句需要使用陈述句语序，后面也无需加问号

雅思口语批改：At the moment I noticed that there were about seven corgi puppies frolicking around him. So I asked him what he was doing.

雅思口语问题：指代不明

He responded that he was just racing with his small pets and the first one would be given the name Gabriel the same as his and the rest would be named from number one to six.

first one 指代不明，改成winner of the game会明确很多。

雅思口语批改：He responded that he was just racing with his puppies and the winner of the game would be named Gabriel -- just the same as his and the rest would be named from one to six.

雅思口语问题：中式表达

That was so funny I never heard before. I said how did he come up with this idea? He said he had no idea but it occurred to him suddenly when he saw children running around. Oh maybe I made some contributions for him. Finally, I said goodbye to him and wished him a good ending.

这一段用于描述自己的反应和感受,但是表达过于中式。第一句话是个病句，可以更改成 It was so funny that I was cracked up. 后面进一步加强，I even started to wonder how he came up with the idea. 然后外国人解释，he told me he had a tough time figuring out how to name the dogs till he saw some kids running around in this park one day.

雅思口语批改：It was so funny that I was cracked up. A bit confused, the foreigner, however, went on to explain that he had a tough time figuring out how to name the dogs till he saw some kids running around in this park one day. I have to say it was a brilliant yet quite novel idea. Don’t you think so?

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